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clve527
Member

since 2002-07-08

Posts 200

0 posted 2002-12-09 09:35 PM

He orders me coffee,
says it reminds him
of a bruise I acquired
after fist met thigh
on some lonely evening.

Although I want green tea,
to match the color his eyes
would be if tears
flowed freely through them,

I utter no complaints.

If he knew me at all
he wouldn't love me.

StellarChica
Member

since 2002-07-06

Posts 207
floating down a river...

1 posted 2002-12-09 09:55 PM

Wooow. This was good. Great. Amazing. Yes. Excellent work.

Jenn Cirrincione

Member Elite

since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

2 posted 2002-12-10 08:30 AM

"If he knew me at all he wouldn't love me."
I can understand this line rather well. Heh...strange isn't it.
I liked the way you did this, unconventional to the rest of the forums.

Jenn

"I keep looking, looking for something more." Sara Evans

elyot
New Member

since 2002-12-10

Posts 2

3 posted 2002-12-10 07:36 PM

Solid piece as always Case --

Congrats on your gold win in the NPAC!!!

You go grrl!

E

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

4 posted 2002-12-11 02:42 AM

Casey~
I really like this piece.
You've made a powerful statement with just a
few well-chosen words. I like that.
Very nicely done.
Congratulations, too, on your NPAC award...awesome!
I can't wait to see more of your work.
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes