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Forever Alone
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
Forever Alone I am forever alone She cries Only her heart echos back And the night stars disappear from the sky Leaving her surrounded by black Her soul sheds the tears that her eyes won't reveal Feeling only sadness deeper than the sky Emptiness more hollow than the black night The unshed tears burning trails down her cheeks Faded memories Too often relived Pushing to the surface They don't bring comfort now As the dawn starts filling the sky She whispers once more I am forever alone And the dawn brings only more darkness with it. WinterWren |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571 |
This was very well written. Good one! *Allison* |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
I agree that this was extremely well written, but very sad. Are you okay? Y'know, your not alone, 'Wren. If you ever need to talk, I'm here, even if just to comiserate or whatever. I more often than not feel the same way, one of the reasons I started writing. Well anyway, just thought I'd let you know I'm here, and to say I'm not THAT good! There's no need to *bow* to me! LOL Besides, I'm sure your much cuter standing up! Grr... In the words of my good friend Bryan, "That was my evil side. Now excuse me WHILE I KICK IT'S ARSE!" Lol! Just trying to lighten the mood! Later! Rich "You can't hurt meee!! 'Cause I've got on my cheeeeese helmet!" |
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Star T Member
since 2002-07-12
Posts 182Philadelphia, US |
my GOD winterwren u are such a talent. i feel u so much.its like i'm reading my story rite there.i love u even without knowing u.is this how u feel inside?or its just another poem?i really would like to know.i also want u to know, i'm here if u need a friend. that is the bestest and deepest reaching poem i've read in a long long time.i'll keep watching out for u.and reply me to my email if u want.i'll be waiting... "her soul shed the teaes her eyes wont reveal." "and the night stars disappear from the sky" those lines were awesome and so sad.i actually have a deep feeling for the stars and i cant begin to imagine it disappearing from the sky.i actually once wrote a poem on that once.ok i think i'm talking too much.holla back! |
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Rainbowdust Member
since 2002-12-05
Posts 320Sydney, Australia |
Her soul sheds the tears that her eyes won't reveal I absolutely adored this poem! You must have a lot of courage to open yourself up and feel things so deeply... a friend once told me, "You're only alone when no one understand you".. and from the replies you've received so far, I don't think you'll ever be alone... The soul would have no rainbows, had the eyes no tears. |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
Thank you all for your comforting replies! You are all so precious and kind. WinterWren |
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Smoothy Member
since 2002-12-02
Posts 119The dark side of the moon |
This reminds me of this one time I was looking up into the starry night and I wondered to myself, where'd my ceiling go?lol. All kidding aside this ws a very well written if sad piece. I agree with Rich, you probably are cuter standing up. Sorry, 'bout that.lol Bryan Love conquers all, so I must be in a losing battle. |
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Ephraim Junior Member
since 2002-12-07
Posts 24 |
For some, lonliness is not the curse, but an enjoyed blessing. The poem, poet, is superb. ~Ephraim |
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xxxnuttyangelxxx Member
since 2002-12-06
Posts 72New York |
Great poem, looking foward to reading more of your work. thanks shea |
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