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dinky Member
since 2002-10-19
Posts 258 |
come home spaced out, crawled out, my window my whole life's like a crescendo, the scream's keep gettin louder go take a bath, forget about all the crap Why do they interogate me? Can't they see i'm just not happy? you dont care, so i dont either... Run Away Beaver "sometimes i just feel like quittin i still might why do i put up this fight? why do i still write?" [This message has been edited by dinky (12-06-2002 09:05 PM).] |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
o.0;; I'm not quite sure what to make of this one, aside from the obvious. (It should be mentioned that i'm running on no sleep and too much caffine.) It was a really good poem. Only one thing bothered me, and it's one of the problems I have in my poems, line length. It kills the flow when the length of the lines suddenly jumps in length... but that was the only problem I saw! Keep on writin'! Good work! Rich "You can't hurt meee!! 'Cause I've got on my cheeeeese helmet!" |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571 |
This poem is about me!! I AM THE RUNNAWAY BEEEVER!!! YEA..Scuse me..I must go build my dam. *Allison* |
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PoeticGoddessOfDepression Member
since 2002-07-02
Posts 439I am everywhere |
DAMS! omg... ah hahahaa me and Keegan were talking about dams yesterday after English.. gosh that little man is funny! Anyway.. yes... very interesting poem. I don't take baths.. i take showers. Showers are good... they smell good.  there's this one guy.. and he always smells good.GOD!! Yes.. i liked the part about the beaver.. my favorite part... beavers. I like their tails. Beaver. Anyway... good write, good job, good show... and that my friends, is that! ah ahahaaa bye lol ~sara |
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dinky Member
since 2002-10-19
Posts 258 |
hey, thanx 2 every1 for replyin, it means a lot Hopelessromanticguy- thx, yea the length did kinda mess it up thx fro replyin and bein honest allison(or should i say run away beaver)- thx for replyin but u didnt make the tape 4 me sara- thx very much (i forgot what u said in ur reply but i do remember ahhaaha or somethin like that ~samantha~ "sometimes i just feel like |
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foreverwithyou Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 204Wonderland |
i like beaverz..... i like em'!!!! "run away with you if thingz dont go as planned planned and that could be a gamble i've already roled the dice"-EVERCLEAR LOL nice poem sam i think that i red it over at brittz that one time the whole crechendo thing but the end the runaway beaver was a surprise i didnt expect that but "Yeah, Baby,YEAH!!!  CATHY"I am who I am who I am who am I?" [This message has been edited by foreverwithyou (12-08-2002 10:32 AM).] |
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Riley 
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
This is pretty good.... quote: but instead of gettin, maybe getting....not that i don't like that because that is how we talk, which kind of adds to it..because I don't know..but maybe..not sure....ok...good poem Riley Morning mist clings to my face, and my soul opens up to you...... |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571 |
Samantha wants to be a rapper when she grows up. She can`t help but talk ghetto. *Allison* LOL |
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xxxnuttyangelxxx Member
since 2002-12-06
Posts 72New York |
I can relate to this poem very much .. i enjoyed it thank you.. shea |
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dinky Member
since 2002-10-19
Posts 258 |
what???? who said i wanted to be a rapper??? ok.. so i do, i know that it aint very realistic but o well... who cares, i cant help it anywayz.. again thx for replyin! ~samantha~ "sometimes i just feel like |
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