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branden726

Senior Member

since 2000-09-25

Posts 607
Bay City, MI

0 posted 2002-12-04 07:34 PM

Loving you,
Is it true,
I only wish I really knew,
Will I forever be with you.

Loving you,
Will never end,
Together with you,
Until my life ends.

Loving you,
Will never cease,
I'll be with you,
Every single day.

Loving you,
Is so great,
When I think about you,
My knees begin to shake.

Loving you,
Scares me to death,
But in the end,
Will put me to bed.

All you other poets beware my true feelings and poetry are about to flare!
~*~Branden~*~

Smoothy
Member

since 2002-12-02

Posts 119
The dark side of the moon

1 posted 2002-12-04 07:54 PM

Ahh. Love poetry. My forte. Overall this is a very good piece. I like how the theme is repeated throughout. Good job.

HopelessRomanticGuy
Member

since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

2 posted 2002-12-04 09:58 PM

Well, I won't go as far to say I'm a master of love poems, but still, this IS very good! It's very sweet! I enjoyed it alot!

Rich

"You can't hurt meee!! 'Cause I've got on my cheeeeese helmet!"

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

3 posted 2002-12-05 01:57 PM

Love is so powerful and overwhelming...great poem!

Standing on the edge of the world
Now I don’t want you to catch me
I want you to let me
Stand up here and walk on my own

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

4 posted 2002-12-05 02:21 PM

branden~
You always pen such beautiful and loving thoughts,
and this is no exception.
Very nicely done.
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

branden726

Senior Member

since 2000-09-25

Posts 607
Bay City, MI

5 posted 2002-12-05 05:04 PM

Thanks guys

all your comments inspire me to write more.

Jenn Cirrincione

Member Elite

since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

6 posted 2002-12-06 09:53 AM

Someone's feeling mushy, huh?

I'm with you in that boat..no worries.
Nice job.

Jenn

"I keep looking, looking for something more." Sara Evans

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

7 posted 2002-12-06 01:04 PM

That a truly wonderful piece. But you would know that without little 'ol me telling you. Too bad Im telling you anyway. I really liked it.
Laugh often, love much, live well.

WinterWren
"I want you to believe in life. Will you find out who you are too late, to change? -Dishwalla-

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