Teen Poetry #6 |
For the Deranged, the Mystic and the Traumatised |
AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
Once again, the title lends meaning on the subject of the poem, not really the actual poem. Both this piece and "A Passions Love" are based on the same thing though not a series... In an empty room, Sheer curtains billow. The breeze, as chill as the absence Of life, from which I've drawn my own conclusions. Cold and forbidden, My clouded mind stirrs. Rekindling love from the ashes of lost innocence, with which This Phoenix shall draw no breath. Too long I've depended On your words to give me strength, My own meaningless in my eyes. My voice echoes in a head Of lost dreams, unable to imagine A world where you aren't the sun The moon, the stars, The live giving earth from which I have long been rejected. This river shall flow, too swift For light to swim upstream, Too cold for hope to give birth To joy and too dark For you to build any castle Of sand upon it's banks. Stone may over-come the tide, But your pearl-making sand Can hold no structure. I burned you once, History repeats, For future reference, I'm sorry. ~I haven't memorized all of the cute things to say but I'm working on it~ [This message has been edited by AngelShell (09-23-2002 06:01 AM).] |
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ShadyMakaveli Member
since 2002-08-21
Posts 128 |
I really like this poem, i myself wish i could write like this, but i'm stuck with the rhyming scheme, and unable to break free from it, but ur poem was great, it provided me with an intense image, and was very enjoyable. good work. |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Another beautiful poem. What it is about those billowing curtains? I liked the use of extended metaphor, expressed through the images in which you wrote... Oh, and fix the spelling of "Phoenix." Great job. Nice pic, too... you sexy thing... Parasite Learn to place poetry before people |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
I'm impressed. I'm off to read the other one you mentioned. Very impressed indeed. I have a lizard, and his name is Jake. |
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