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Lil'Chick Fantasies |
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Riley 
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain 
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This title is kinda wierd, but I guess it fits huh....this is kinda confusing but its about teen love and people telling teens that we can't know what it truely it. We know what it is and we can feel it, though it might not last, we can feel it. my hand slowly falls from heavens own pool into your tear drop eyes filled with hope as only you can say three simple words so hard to find even harder to tell look at my face how can you lie because the truth shall preveal from its icy depth covered by pain the romantic love touched by a teen that can understand some say we can't know do they not remeber the eyes that met them leaving each day the wave ours hand join together and the sky opens rain falls but i know its a kiss from above corny love songs don't know how to tell undiscovered talent is hidden in everyone ours met and complimented now we are ment to be no matter what you do heaven will know our love shall bond us distance doesn't matter for love ~*Theres a sparkle in your eye that only i see, and theres a place in your heart where only i wanna be*~ |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Beautiful writing, Riley. I like "the sky opens." Other than that, I think this did a good job of expressing the message of teen love. I agree that people can feel love, and I agree that distance doesn't matter. But distance can be a very painful thing, to the point where you can no longer stand just being in love. The only reason that love is dangerous for people so young is because often, we are too young and inexperienced to be prepared to deal with the implications of love... we cannot fully handle it, to the point where it becomes a bad thing, instead of a good thing, as it should be. You've stirred up a lovely bunch of sentiments.  Awaiting your next... Parasite Learn to place poetry before people |
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Riley
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
Parasite: Thank you so much, I think I am starting to get the hang of this writing thing huh. I was just really full of it when I wrote this and listening to my music ( as I often do ), I am pleased with myself to get such high praise ( sp? ), from you, and again I thank you. Riley ~*Theres a sparkle in your eye that only i see, and theres a place in your heart where only i wanna be*~ |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
Wow, this is one of the best I've read from you. It flowed really, really, really nicely and for once I wasn't even bothered by the lack of punctuation  There is some really emotive imagery here that is used absolutely beautifully. Really, really, well done. Applause worthy. Michelle. ~I haven't memorized all of the cute things to say but I'm working on it~ |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
"corny love songs don't know how to tell undiscovered talent is hidden in everyone" I love this part! Great job! I have a lizard, and his name is Jake. |
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