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moonguardian2004
Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 64
MA, USA

0 posted 2002-12-01 10:11 PM

what's the point of thinking
that we were meant to be
because if we were
you wouldn't have left me

my heart was yours
and yours was mine
but now i finally see
my heart is yours no more

my heart has found someone new
who shares hi heart with mine
with all the love i have for him
my feelings are still entwined

my heart was broke and i cried
for fear that it would end
but now my tears have been dried
and my heart helped to mend

what did i do to deserve him
this i will never know
but now one thing is clear
my signs of moving on are about to show

no more wishing you were mine
because i know you don't feel the same
and in my heart i have acquired
a whole new different flame

it is no longer anger
or thoughts of what i lost
it is now hope of survival
when once again i trust love
to thaw my inner frost

it might not work
this i know well
but now HE might be the one.....
the one that would catch me if i fall

so after all this is said and done
and my hope is renewed
i will have learned
that i should no longer weep over you

i will never say good bye
although at times it feels like u did
the memories will continue on
as my heart comes out from where it hid

what's the point of thinking
that we were meant to be
because if we were
you wouldn't have left me

NSnaomian
Member

since 2002-07-22

Posts 232
In my troll closet I be

1 posted 2002-12-02 07:52 PM

Well, first off Welcome! Secondly..I know just what you are saying/feeling in this and last you need to check out your rhyme scheme..some stanzas have a different pattern than others. Unless you want it that way...
Very good for a first post here...Looking forward to more of your work.

Laura

"I have seen what a laugh can do. It can transform almost unbearable tears into something bearable, even hopeful."
-Bob Hope-

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

2 posted 2002-12-03 02:42 PM

Welcome to Passions!!

Really great first poem

I enjoyed reading it and look forward to seeing more from you hopefully in the near future

P.S.- Check ur e-mail for a special greeting

Standing on the edge of the world
Now I don’t want you to catch me
I want you to let me
Stand up here and walk on my own

TopGunLauren
Senior Member

since 2000-08-02

Posts 718
California

3 posted 2002-12-03 09:33 PM

Great first piece I can really relate to it. Keep up the awsome work and can't wait to read more.
Lauren

Tamma

Senior Member

since 2000-01-17

Posts 794
In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV

4 posted 2002-12-04 09:03 AM

WELCOME

Now, with that said...This poems reminds me of...well, a younger me...So I could really relate to it. Keep it up, I'd love to read more from you.

~ Tamma

Have you ever heard that "No shirt, No shoes" rule? My question is...Why doesn't that rule include pants?

PrincessNets
Member

since 2002-10-30

Posts 103
NewYork, USA

5 posted 2002-12-04 09:11 AM

First I want to welcome! Next, I know exactly how you feel. This poem made me want to cry; it hits so close to home. Great poem. Look forward to seeing more of your poetry!

-Jeanette-

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

6 posted 2002-12-15 04:04 AM

moonguardian2004~
A nicely written piece that you're shared as your
introductory post. I enjoyed this.
Welcome to Passions, and I look forward to reading
lots more from you.
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

roxywrestlegirl04
Member

since 2002-10-29

Posts 74
good ole DINWIDDIE

7 posted 2002-12-18 10:33 AM

i like this alot.....i can relate TOTALLY!!! KEEP IT UP!!
LIZ

live,love,and die...but take RISKS..thatz what makes life worth the living, love worth the heartache,and death the new beginning!

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