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Teen Poetry #6

Words From the Heart

Trouble Breathing
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since 2002-11-12

Posts 63

0 posted 2002-11-14 08:57 PM

Words will rip you apart,
A dagger through your heart,
Your soul is as black
As the day in which we met,
Underneath the howling moon,
And you said love is forever
Which today means just short of never
But I don’t know what to say.
It’s Okay.
I never loved you in spite
I always loved you despite,
All the awful things you’ve done
And the way you’d melt if left to burn
Underneath the bright flaming sun
But on a day like today,
All that’s left is to push you away.

Darkness
Member

since 2002-10-17

Posts 202
The place just beyond my eyes, where my spirit flies.

1 posted 2002-11-14 09:26 PM

I liked this one a lot. The conflicting feelings you gave out in this really made it interesting.

Thanks for the read

Darkness

Auguste

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since 2000-02-16

Posts 3953
By the sea

2 posted 2002-11-14 10:16 PM

A sad write, a poem filled with emotion. I want to Welcome you to Passions in poetry. Feel free the read and reply to the work of others here.

[This message has been edited by Auguste (11-14-2002 10:18 PM).]

Trouble Breathing
Member

since 2002-11-12

Posts 63

3 posted 2002-11-16 11:53 PM

thanks

I'm really liking it here so far..maybe later on ill post a bit more of my stuff..

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

4 posted 2002-11-19 05:07 PM

Trouble Breathing~
I really enjoyed the rhythm of this piece.
I flows almost like a song.
Nicely done.
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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