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I; Myself
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I; Myself |
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SCREAMIN Member
since 2003-04-28
Posts 51US, Tx |
I tell myself to see myself But I cannot see at all I tell myself to be myself And that’s when the damned fall I tell myself to help myself But I just run away I tell myself to show myself But it doesn’t ever change I tell myself to hear myself But I’ve grown deaf and died I tell myself to know myself And I realize I’ve never tried I tell myself to mend myself But the pain won’t go away I tell myself to hold myself But the pain will still remain But soft, what light through yonder window break. It is the east, and Juliet is the sun... |
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laurie Member
since 2003-05-28
Posts 153canada, ontario |
thanx, screamin. you've put down on paper what l've been trying to tell the world for hte last two months, so thank you. even better than that, you've done it with style, and skill. and talent. laurie. thanx for hte read. |
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BeautifulMistake New Member
since 2003-05-28
Posts 5Ontario, Canada |
I like the rhythm of this poem, it's so fluid. It's very good. : ) |
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SCREAMIN Member
since 2003-04-28
Posts 51US, Tx |
BeautifulMistake- rhthym was one thing I was actually working on when I wrote this peice. So thank you for letting me know I reached my goal for this one. Laurie- I've been at the mercy of the descriptions of this writing so many times in my life. It is just now that I've been able to translate it into words, and I do believe it's near accuracy. Thanks for the compliments. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Too many people living like this myself included, don't get so firmly entrenched in at all that you give up completely. great write, simple and to the point |
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