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SCREAMIN
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since 2003-04-28
Posts 51
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0 posted 2003-06-09 08:36 PM



I tell myself to see myself
But I cannot see at all
I tell myself to be myself
And that’s when the damned fall

I tell myself to help myself
But I just run away
I tell myself to show myself
But it doesn’t ever change

I tell myself to hear myself
But I’ve grown deaf and died
I tell myself to know myself
And I realize I’ve never tried

I tell myself to mend myself
But the pain won’t go away
I tell myself to hold myself
But the pain will still remain

But soft, what light through yonder window break. It is the east, and Juliet is the sun...

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laurie
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since 2003-05-28
Posts 153
canada, ontario
1 posted 2003-06-09 11:56 PM


thanx, screamin. you've put down on paper what l've been trying to tell the world for hte last two months, so thank you. even better than that, you've done it with style,
and skill.
and talent.
laurie.
thanx for hte read.

BeautifulMistake
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since 2003-05-28
Posts 5
Ontario, Canada
2 posted 2003-06-10 12:03 PM


I like the rhythm of this poem, it's so fluid. It's very good. : )
SCREAMIN
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since 2003-04-28
Posts 51
US, Tx
3 posted 2003-06-10 12:37 PM


BeautifulMistake- rhthym was one thing I was actually working on when I wrote this peice. So thank you for letting me know I reached my goal for this one.
Laurie- I've been at the mercy of the descriptions of this writing so many times in my life. It is just now that I've been able to translate it into words, and I do believe it's near accuracy. Thanks for the compliments.

Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350
the ass-end of space
4 posted 2003-06-11 03:04 PM


Too many people living like this myself included, don't get so firmly entrenched in at all that you give up completely. great write, simple and to the point
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