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Crucifixion |
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lil cherry Member
since 2002-10-02
Posts 86Ont, Can. 
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What bliss, what ecstasy death has brought me I smiled as they slammed the nails into my hands Laughed as they raised the cross My own blood trickling down my body smells so sweet I wish I could taste it The pain of the barbed wire and chains wrapped around my body is pure pleasure to me I can feel the moon’s gaze behind me And the heat from the flames above my head warms me I am aware of the animals around me They don’t bother me There’s a snake caressing my skin A falcon keeps watch over me from above my arm, Resting loyally on the cross A rat sits on the bible they rested at my feet They said they were saving me as they pulled off my cape exposing white flesh And they were, but not in the way they intended I am saved from life, from living a lie Death is a sweet friend to me God did not save me God was invented so that weak people could give themselves a reason to live He wasn’t there that night they killed me Nor will he ever join me For I am in such bliss that no one could penetrate this joy to bring me down I enjoyed the pain until the moment I was dead They were shocked, gasping as they realized what they had done They had killed an angel Not an angel of god however, and angel of reality, of life These weak men prayed before me as my cold dead stare gazed at them What has the world come to when the innocent die so easily How could an angel deserve to die? Just as an endnote, this isn't meant to offend anyone it was a poem written to describe a scene that one of my friends drew using me as a model. i am against no one for their relegion and i do not think any relegion is invalid. |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Very nice... reminds me of the :wumpscut: song "Golgotha." Download it sometime if you get the chance... hehe... Some powerful imagery. I like how you dealt with multiple aspects of the actual crucifixion, as opposed to being overly broad and storytelling it... you talked about the feelings present, the experience, which made it seem all the more real. I enjoyed this poem quite a bit. I happen to be a fan of poetry that is somewhat cynical of popular religious opinion... A very daring, very appealing write. Much praise. Parasite Learn to place poetry before people |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Wow...i dont know quite how to word what i want to say about this. "God was invented so that weak people could give themselves a reason to live" <---thats a very interesting thought that never in a million years crossed my mind but am now seriously wondering. The imagery in this was very powerful and i just overall loved it...LOVED IT Sometimes I get so weird |
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lil cherry Member
since 2002-10-02
Posts 86Ont, Can. |
thanks guys, relegion is a thing i have pondered many times. i don't think typical relegions are ever something i will fully understand. but i'm happy for people who can be strong in their beleifs contrary to what this poem may lead certain people to beleive. |
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