Teen Poetry #6 |
"Lullaby" (and companion lullaby song) |
chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
Her box of sunshine lies unopened Not meant for any eyes or any minds to seek And find. Not even hers to keep yet hers to have, but Only to whisper nothing at her eyes. Transparent grays and blues reflect Tendrils of old ivory gazing solely at the Box of tempting shining stars or Crescent moons that come to mind. Beauty seeking, beauty speaking Out of reach for little hands and little hopes That will, one day, make and break A dream. Fly by, lullaby, catch the wind and sigh… * * * * * Fly by, lullaby, catch the wind and sigh A cradle moves, a cradle sooths your sad and distant cries. Fly by, lullaby, catch the wind and sigh Don't shed a tear, don't show your fear Of cloudy silver skies. Fly by, lullaby, catch the wind and sigh Make a dream, and hush your screams When it is time to die. * * * * * Tried my hand at some freeverse...I miss my rhyming...Oh well...changes changes. ^^ I really have no life. oO; Leah [This message has been edited by chasing rain (11-02-2002 09:30 PM).] |
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Hallucination Member
since 2001-03-18
Posts 419 |
well, I lik this version a lot...right now I don't see what another/real version can add to this one...but you know better, I guess? |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
I'd love to see another version! Post it! Post it! As for this version, I think you're pretty darn good at freeverse! Well, a great deal better than I am! lol. Later! -Rich "You can't hurt meee!! 'Cause I've got on my cheeeeese helmet!" |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Hehehe---Leah...I REALLY liked the second portion! I found it to be...bouncy! Don't ask me why! I'm not disregarding your first portion though---it was spiced with Leah-Goodnes...and that, my dear, is saying alot! Tyhla du dra piyd uv so seht! |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
hey, this is kinda neat...it is all pretty and whimsical and at the end it talks about death lol. that was surprising, but it added an interesting twist. thanks for the read. -bergundy- "crack my head open, on your kitchen floor. to prove to you, that i have brains." -Alkaline Trio |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
There's a lot of hype surrounding Leah-goodness. And this piece is a good example of why that is. Kiss your muse hello, Leah. Parasite Learn to place poetry before people |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Leah~ This is so beautifully penned. I am truly enjoying reading your work. Very nicely done. ~Vicky P.S. Don't forget to check out Teen Challenge #2! "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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