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Teen Poetry #6

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Riley

Senior Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

0 posted 2003-09-18 09:42 PM

cold hands grip me and send chills down me
you don't understand what i have become
a transformation held before you eyes
to commit a life not relavent to you
i regret every tear i spent on you
i am still shaking so scared so alone
right now i have forgotten someone
i wish he were here now, because i need him
to hold onto me now because i am falling
still harder to the core
will you be there?

* the pouring rain kisses my lips with innocence as you look into my eyes *

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

1 posted 2003-09-19 12:34 PM

Amazing piece! I especially love the first two lines.
The flow was just right, I really love it.
Thanks for sharing, it's going in my library.

WinterWren
Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't mean they don't love you with all they have.

eor
Senior Member

since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

2 posted 2003-09-19 01:51 AM

you always write such beautiful poetry...

"For those who understand you, no explanation is necessary. For those who don't, none is possible."

Riley

Senior Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

3 posted 2003-09-19 08:17 AM

winterwren: thank you so much, this was very spur of the moment not planned nothing....glad you enjoyed.

eor: there are no words that can express my thanks!

riley

* the pouring rain kisses my lips with innocence as you look into my eyes *

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