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Teen Poetry #6

Pain

Dustin462
Junior Member

since 2002-08-09

Posts 23
Selah, WA

0 posted 2003-09-12 05:28 PM

Tears fall to floor
Shattering on impact
Shards seperate themselves
Across the room
You can't see the hurt
You can't see the anger
Nothing is there
Except transparent pain

magic_612
Member

since 2003-07-31

Posts 190
NB, Canada

1 posted 2003-09-13 02:53 PM

I really liked he use of the words "transparent pain".. good job

anya
Member

since 2002-07-27

Posts 393
London, UK

2 posted 2003-09-13 04:00 PM

Short and to the point, you created an interesting and clear image here, there isnt a word wasted in this poem which is always a good thing! well done
anya

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