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Teen Poetry #6

Shattered Window

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

0 posted 2003-09-09 09:25 PM

*I'm still debating on this title, like usual! Tell me what ya think...*
All my life I've looked through a window,
Unable to see the full picture,
Oppurtunities have passed me by,
And still are today,
Now, that tiny window has been shattered,
I see what I have and others don't,
The tiny window was my protection,
Protecting my ignorance,
Reality has seeped into each vein of my body,
Leaving me paralyzed by fear,
Inching its way to my brain,
It has done so already,
Bringing tears of my "pain",
Staying in this mind,
Through every inch of that shattered window.

"At the touch of love, everything becomes a poem." -Plato

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

1 posted 2003-09-09 10:37 PM

I really liked this one,
especially the last 2 lines.
As for the title I think it's just right, that's what caught my attention.
Great job.

WinterWren
Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't mean they don't love you with all they have.

magic_612
Member

since 2003-07-31

Posts 190
NB, Canada

2 posted 2003-09-10 07:17 AM

really good job, and I do also like the title. Thanks for sharing

SilentTears
Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

3 posted 2003-09-13 03:21 PM

I like this. A lot. It expresses the emotion beautifully. Nice work. I'm just about speechless...Loves.

"I would sleep forever, if it meant I'd never stop dreaming..."

anya
Member

since 2002-07-27

Posts 393
London, UK

4 posted 2003-09-13 03:53 PM

this made me think...am liking it though, an interesting idea

Match
Member

since 2002-07-01

Posts 286
Canada Edmonton

5 posted 2003-09-13 04:01 PM

"Reality has seeped into each vein of my body,
Leaving me paralyzed by fear" Don't you hate when that happens, I loved this poem and can relate to the shattered window idea.

I like the title.
-Ash

I wear my crown of thorns
on my liar's chair
full of broken thoughts
I cannot repair

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