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fearing-laughter
Senior Member

since 2001-04-24

Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)

0 posted 2003-09-12 12:12 PM

hey, i kinda wrote this one at like four o'clock in the morning but meh, i kinda like it. honesty is always cool though. -bergundy-

get out of my head,
get out of my mind.
i hate the fact that,
i think about you,
all the time.

you never meant,
a single word you said.
but i guess,
i should have realized that,
back then.

i was stupid enough,
to let myself,
believe in you,
once again.

don't look at me,
with earnest eyes,
it may have worked before,
but now i see,
through your lies.

no one can make you feel inferior, unless you let them.--eleanor roosevelt

[This message has been edited by fearing-laughter (09-12-2003 12:13 AM).]

anya
Member

since 2002-07-27

Posts 393
London, UK

1 posted 2003-09-13 03:57 PM

yeah, very understandable sentiments, i liked 'dont look at with earnest eyes'...a good image there
anya

lauren03
Member

since 2002-01-04

Posts 64
oh, usa

2 posted 2003-09-18 08:42 PM

aaaaaaaah lies, yes they suck don't they. I know how you feel though. good write, keep it up.

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

3 posted 2003-09-19 01:05 AM

I can relate to this one well. *sigh*
Excellent job, you put the emotion into your words.
Thanks for sharing.

WinterWren
Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't mean they don't love you with all they have.

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

4 posted 2003-09-19 09:02 PM

this was an alright poem. i like stuff that isnt so cut and dry. i liked the emotion but i would like to see some more imagery

Jaime

Registered

Member
Posts 250

5 posted 2003-09-20 01:23 AM

My pleasure chain... now see, that's where things can get a little R-rated. You might want to edit that.

Anyway, I liked this except that the pauses were a little distracting. But I thought that it was simple yet as firm and as strong as any true, determined statement. Especially one that refuses victimization.

Well done.

jaime.

the faeries creep into my hair at night leaving it in terrible knots

Why
Junior Member

since 2003-09-26

Posts 32
Middle of nowhere

6 posted 2003-09-28 12:14 PM

nice poem, it speaks alot of truth, very nice

Poems free us and trap us all the same.
But still they put our hearts at ease.

AlostHeart
Member

since 2003-05-01

Posts 78
Wisconsin, U.S.

7 posted 2003-09-29 10:22 AM

I like this it sums up a few of my relationships.
good job and keep it up
~Tori

Be happy, and respectful, dont forget about those ones that will always love you no matter how much you screw up!

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