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Teen Poetry #6

have u ever

angel eyez
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since 2003-09-05

Posts 3

0 posted 2003-09-05 10:56 PM

have u ever been down and wish a special someone was there?
to help u through thick and thin?
to give you a shoulder to cry on and lissten to your problems and what u have to say?
how u ever felt bad cuz u can't find that special someone?
well let me tell u u've found her/him u just don't see it someetimes their right in front of your eyez but u don't notic cuz your looking for someone and not knowing they in front of ur face. don't look too far always give people a chance u never know u might find the special some one

Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08

Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S

1 posted 2003-09-06 06:25 AM

this is a great poem. it expresses alot the only fault i seen was the formatting toward the end. it just seemed a little to bunched up. i hope to see more work from you soon. keep it up.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-

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