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Teen Poetry #6

Your Not There

BrokenAngel
Member

since 2002-01-06

Posts 141
Puryear, TN, USA

0 posted 2003-09-03 08:01 PM

I wake up at night
Calling your name
Feeling your touch

But your not there

I sit at home
Hearing your voice
Seeing your eyes

But your not there

I look in the mirror
Seeing you beside me
Seeing you hold me

But your not there

I know where you are
I know why you are there
I know what your doing

But it doesn't change
The fact that I look around
Searching for you

And your not there

I miss you so much
I need you with me
To keep me safe

But your not there

I can't wait till the day
That you come home
And I can think of that place

And know your not there

~*~Dedicated to my Marine Cody, I love and miss you so much baby!!

Read my work and read my thoughts
I'll go back into the night now
---Night Angel

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

1 posted 2003-09-03 08:06 PM

Awww...I must say this is sad! But good, as well. It's terribly heart breaking when someone you miss is gone and you just have thoughts of them, reoccuring. This was good!

I found one thing wrong with this...You used the wrong form of "your"...it should be "you're"! ~Jess

"At the touch of love, everything becomes a poem." -Plato

magic_612
Member

since 2003-07-31

Posts 190
NB, Canada

2 posted 2003-09-04 09:55 AM

awww this was a really good poem, I liked it a lot. I look forward to reading more of your work. Thanks for sharing!!

BrokenAngel
Member

since 2002-01-06

Posts 141
Puryear, TN, USA

3 posted 2003-09-04 08:09 PM

Ooops...thanx for pointing that out Peaches, I just now caught that!! *blushes* I'm embarrased.

Read my work and read my thoughts
I'll go back into the night now
---Night Angel

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