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cuda04
Junior Member

since 2003-09-03

Posts 46
Wisconsin,USA

0 posted 2003-09-03 12:50 PM

Pictures weave a story
Of one so very blessed
With boys and friends surrounding
And A’s on all of her tests
Portraits of a lifetime
Portraying love to compete
All questions hold their answers
Breaking records, winning meets
What isn’t told in pictures
What isn’t down to see
Are the answers never realized
The longings to be free
The nights alone and tear-filled
The mornings trapped in bed
The ingenious imaginings
Too advanced for those not dead
The depressive truth of living
The escape so far away
The stark black and white contrast
The horrendous hew of gray
Pictures tell a story
Of a popular girl
A story of lies
Of too perfect a world.

brezee
Member

since 2003-06-02

Posts 140

1 posted 2003-09-03 06:32 PM

Nice write, I really like this one because I can really relate because people think i have a perfect life but if they really lived my life they'd learn that everything isn't always what it appears. well anyways, it was very good, and keep up the good work!

~*~*brezee*~*~

Toasty
Member

since 2003-06-09

Posts 74
my little hole in wisconsin

2 posted 2003-09-03 08:52 PM

Something in this really touched me. I hope you realize what a gift you truly have. You have a knack for making a portrait of time with words. Keep up the good work!

~toasty

"Nothing is so strong as gentleness; Nothing so gentle as real strength." -Francis de Sales.

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

3 posted 2003-09-04 01:41 AM

First off, Welcome to piptalk!

I haven't been here for awhile(internet problems) so there are some new names for me.
I really love this poem, I think alot of people can relate to it.
It was very descriptive, and the last line ended it perfectly.
Well done.

WinterWren
Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't mean they don't love you with all they have.

xEmperorEmber
Member

since 2000-03-28

Posts 136
tx

4 posted 2003-09-04 02:52 AM

I like this, looking foward to seeing more.

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