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Teen Poetry #6

yearning eyes

Toasty
Member

since 2003-06-09

Posts 74
my little hole in wisconsin

0 posted 2003-08-27 06:44 PM

I've had writer's block for quite a while- and then suddenly I wrote this. Hope it's not too bad.
What is it I just can't name
that I see burning in your eyes
a yearning,painful growing flame
I just can't seem to recognise

it used to be that life was simple
but now I've got my test
what we have was always simple
but this isn't like the rest

of the arguments we had on the phone
now when you talk I feel alone
something was found, but now is lost
too hard to tell what's the cost

of space between us and different lives
the same passions, but different drives
do you think of me when you're all alone
is it just me you call on your phone

or will you find love in someone's arms
and fall for some pretty girl's charms
or will you still be here with me
my love forever, indefinitely

for now I'll just sit and guess
try to find peace that just won't stay
imagining things ,trying my best
promise me that you won't stray

"Nothing is so strong as gentleness; Nothing so gentle as real strength." -Francis de Sales.

magic_612
Member

since 2003-07-31

Posts 190
NB, Canada

1 posted 2003-08-27 10:58 PM

this is awesome, glad your over your writer's block because this is a great poem. I really hope to read more of your work

*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

2 posted 2003-08-28 01:19 AM

..sigh..uncertainty I know that right now, though slightly different situation. Still beautifully done, there was one spot were the ryhme seemed stressed but overall the flow worked well and the context was very full in the since of full of emotion. Nice job.
~Live and Laugh~

The problem with resisting temptation is you never know if you'll get the chance again
~Bella~

Toasty
Member

since 2003-06-09

Posts 74
my little hole in wisconsin

3 posted 2003-08-28 05:19 PM

thanks for reading! :0)

~toasty

"Nothing is so strong as gentleness; Nothing so gentle as real strength." -Francis de Sales.

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