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Teen Poetry #6

Im usually stronger!!

fallen_star1715
Junior Member

since 2003-06-25

Posts 18

0 posted 2003-08-27 02:55 AM

Every since ive meet u,
Every1 says ive changed,
That i have no time 4 them,
that my life has been rearanged,
Sorry if im drifting,
but i dont know what to do,
I want to keep my friends..,
but i want to keep u 2,
I could lose my friends ova u,
Please tell me what to do!!!
Hey every1,
this isnt my best write but i jus needed to write about this problem im having!!! Sorry! but ill keep writing my better poems!!! There coming soon! Tell me if u dont like it so i know! But dont b 2 creul :P

Match
Member

since 2002-07-01

Posts 286
Canada Edmonton

1 posted 2003-08-27 01:07 PM

Hmm..I sort of liked it, But i'm just not to found of the way you put numbers like every1, To me it sounded to internet slangy. Thats just me tho.
-ash

I wear my crown of thorns
on my liar's chair
full of broken thoughts
I cannot repair

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