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My greatest fear
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My greatest fear |
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TheSphinx New Member
since 2003-07-30
Posts 4 |
What is your greatest fear? What scares you the most? Is it snakes or garden gnomes? Or cockroaches on your toast? What makes you cry at night? What steals your breath away? Do you cringe at the sight of blood? Is there something you avoid everyday? Well I have a fear and it's none of the above. I fear being alone, that's what I'm afraid of. Not being the only one at home or anything like that. I fear being alone in life and this is what I'm getting at. Sometimes you go a little crazy and I don't see you for a while and when you're gone I miss your pretty smile. But you've always come back and for this I'm glad. Yet next time, maybe not what promises have I had? What if you went away and found someone better than me? Would you still come back, If i'm worse than he? What would I do, if I didn't have you? What could I do, if you were untrue? This is my fear and I hope it's wrong. I hope we're always together and always get along. I wrote this because every once in a while, one of my two gal friends will get caught up in activities or with their current boyfriend and forget that the other two of us exist for a while. I am male but i tried to write it from a unisexual viewpoint. Comments are welcome and appreciated. -TheSphinx |
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frolicking dolphin Member
since 2003-02-23
Posts 268my own special world |
You did well to write it unisexual because I'm female and I really liked it, I have felt alone not having a boyfriend and my friends going off with their boyfriends and leaving me out so I could relate to it well. Nice work ~*~Karen~*~ |
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Tequilia_Sunrise Senior Member
since 2003-02-19
Posts 612Lochalsh, Ontario, Canada |
I enjoyed this. i couldnt take my eyes off the screan untill about 2/3 the way through, just seemd like rambling to me. BUT still a good poem Tequilia |
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Cinderelly Member
since 2001-12-31
Posts 189NM, USA |
Wow! I can totally relate to this! Anyways, great write . . . Life is a moderately good play w/ a badly written thrid act. - Unknown |
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SilentTears Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 371Lost and Broken |
Aww! This was so sweet. I really enjoyed reading this. I liked the rhyming scheme. Flowed beautifully. Nice work.  "I would sleep forever, if it meant I'd never stop dreaming..." |
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fallen_star1715 Junior Member
since 2003-06-25
Posts 18 |
When reading this poem, it made me actually think and wonder what if it really did happen?¿ It made me be happy with what ive got because mabye one day ill lose it...and the one i love i know someday i will lose =( thanx 4 a gr8 read! |
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BrokenDreams Member
since 2003-02-09
Posts 425In The Clouds |
hey, I share your pain. My greatest fear is and always has been that I will lose the people I am close to. For a long time it kept me from opening up to people. Anyway, good write, and thanks for the read. -Jen |
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fallen_star1715 Junior Member
since 2003-06-25
Posts 18 |
hey, Im going through the same thing!!! Thanks 4 a gr8 read! Dont ever giv up on your friend!! She'll come back if shes a tru friend!!! She might just want a break..but dont giv up u and ur friend proberly mean tha world to her!!! Your a gr8 poet keep writing! Good lucky with ur friend!!! =) |
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magic_612 Member
since 2003-07-31
Posts 190NB, Canada |
very great work, I can also relate to this and you described everything perfectly. I hope it works out for you and thanks for sharing. Good work! |
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