The Charge of the Rock Painters

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Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

0 posted 2002-10-17 04:09 AM

The Charge of the Rock Painters

March to the highest hills
  Practicing their latest drills
On the mountain of death
  Marched the one hundred
Parachutes they left behind
Marched into battle blind
On the mountain of death
Marched the one hundred

Rock Paintors to the fore
Arrayed here like none before
screaming the name of hirr
  as the clouds thunder'd
Ready to do and die
No need to reason why
under the darkened sky
On the mountain of death
Marched the one hundred

Lemmings to the right of them
Lemmings to the left of them
Lemmings in front of them
and they all wonder'd:
beneath flying shot and shell
if they had heard the bell
signalling their march to hell
On the mountain of death
Marched the one hundred

All of the Lemmings there
Leaping into the air
Diving without a care
On the mountain of death
As the ground thunder'd
Cliff divers to the fore
Leaping like none before
Where only angels soar
Dived the one hundred

Lemmings to the right of them
Lemmings to the left of them
Lemmings on top of them
all torn and sunder'd
Shot at with shot and shell
One hundred hero's fell
From the mountain of death
Into the jaws of hell
Nothing was left of them
Left of one hundred

Oh the wild jump they made
We see not their glory fade
Whilst all the world wonder'd
Honour the world they taint
Honour the cliffs the paint
Honour the hundred

Andrew

Always and forever

Riley

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since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

1 posted 2002-10-17 08:05 AM

Wow, I really liked this....the rhyming scheme was awesome.....it threw me off and made me think and I love stuff that does that to me! I had to actually think for a minute...I also liked the repeated of the ne hundred thing...the poem kinda centered around that and it was cool. Great job!

Riley

~* Love humiliates you, hatered cradles you-White Olender *~

Local Parasite

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since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

2 posted 2002-10-17 12:16 PM

LOL... Zu, this is BRILLIANT!  You're awesome man!

I LOVE parodies and you've done a marvelous job of this one... haha... seriously, this is bloody hilarious.  First time I heard the "light brigade" was in ninth grade English class, and my teacher insisted on reading it out in a booming, enthusiastic tone that really brought out the drama of the poem... this brought me way back to that.

I'll honour the one hundred by putting this in my library.  GREAT work, bro...

Parasite

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

[This message has been edited by Local Parasite (10-17-2002 12:17 PM).]

Local Parasite

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since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

3 posted 2002-10-17 12:17 PM

*click* into the library

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2002-10-17 06:18 PM

I thought you wrote this well Zu. An interesting piece. I don't really think I got it though, quite confusing I'll admit.
Nonetheless, a good write.

it'd be nice to hear a clarification as to what this is about

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