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SilentTears
Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

0 posted 2003-08-11 10:57 PM

Water trickles down the back of my neck,
Only there is no rain.
Red tears flow freely from my heart,
Only there is no pain.
Everything outside is so incredibly dreary,
Only the sky is a luminous blue.
I'm completely surrounded by so many people,
Only I'm alone because I'm without you.
There are so many places left to run,
Only no where left to hide.
There are so many people that I can talk to,
Only I don't know what I'm feeling inside.
I only wish I knew how to smile,
Without remembering all the pain.
I wish that I could dwell in the warm sun,
But I still only feel the rain.

"I would sleep forever, if it meant I'd never stop dreaming..."

wicka_basket
Junior Member

since 2003-08-11

Posts 12

1 posted 2003-08-11 11:32 PM

very sad........ Sniffle Sniffle

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

2 posted 2003-08-12 12:05 PM

Woah Meggles...I really liked this alot...Its goin in my library oh fo sho lol! Great job homie.

"Is there anyone out there cause it's getting harder and harder to breathe"~Maroon 5~

frolicking dolphin
Member

since 2003-02-23

Posts 268
my own special world

3 posted 2003-08-12 01:27 PM

This one was so emotional, and sad, I really liked it, nice work.

~*~Karen~*~

~Dream like you'll live forever,live like you'll die tomorrow~

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

4 posted 2003-08-13 12:08 PM

hmmm...there were some good lines in here. A little cliche at parts, but none the less a good piece with obvious emotion that flowed clear.

Lexia
Member

since 2003-07-20

Posts 111
Nowhere

5 posted 2003-08-13 01:19 PM

Very good poem. Very emotional. Great write.

Lex

You may only be one person to the world, but you may also be the world to one person.

*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

6 posted 2003-08-14 12:20 PM

mmm..don't I know the feeling...sigh...very emotional I will agree a little cliche in parts but the best of us do that from time to time and I have no gripes or complaints about any of it except perhaps that there wasn't more, lovely piece
~Live and Laugh~

The problem with resisting temptation is you never know if you'll get the chance again
~Bella~

Cinderelly
Member

since 2001-12-31

Posts 189
NM, USA

7 posted 2003-08-14 01:04 AM

I really liked ths one . . . Great write.

Life is a moderately good play w/ a badly written thrid act. - Unknown

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

8 posted 2003-08-16 12:27 PM

WOWWWEEE!!! Nice poem. Felt it the whole way through. Good work! Loves! ~Jess

"At the touch of love, everything becomes a poem." -Plato

blueyedlioness
Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 289
USA

9 posted 2003-08-16 08:32 PM

I decided to read one last poem before signing off tonight... and this was it. I'm glad I chose this one... it's absolutely incredible. Going in my library for sure.

-Lioness

Xelorz
Junior Member

since 2003-08-16

Posts 10
Burlington, Ontario, Canada

10 posted 2003-08-16 10:27 PM

As said before I could certainly feel the emotion. If that was your goal you more then accomplished it.

Krystin18
Junior Member

since 2003-01-19

Posts 20
Ontario, Canada

11 posted 2003-08-16 10:30 PM

... all i can say is wow

For every minute you spend being angry,
You lose 60 seconds of hapiness.

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