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Teen Poetry #6
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brezee
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since 2003-06-02
Posts 140
0 posted 2003-08-04 02:09 AM

Yes you came and took me by surprise
And it was strange at first
But then when I looked into your eyes,
I fell in love, but unrehearsed.

It was worrying and unpredictable
It wasn't very pleasing
But then I saw something so beautiful,
And I thought my mind was teasing.

But later I figured it all out
I thought over everything
And then I wanted to shout
Because I knew I’d do anything

For you, even if you dropped the ball
And told me you hated me,
But the afterthought of it all
Went completely out to sea.

But that’s ok because there’s no need to think
About things that might have been
Cuz’ I think it’s ok to use disappearing ink
When you say that you really love him.

Things may change, you never know
And totally come what may
But right now I love you and you glow
For you are my light night and day.

By:BreAnna Age:15
I think this one of my best.....
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with you
1 posted 2003-08-04 12:35 PM

I liked this, it really was very good
jaysh
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since 2003-04-16
Posts 133
IL, USA
2 posted 2003-08-04 09:30 PM

Yeah, this IS the best you've wrote yet! Im so proud! lol
Rise of Truth
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since 2003-07-12
Posts 59
Beneath the Fury Sun
3 posted 2003-08-09 03:32 PM

15 years old? Shows promise.

Listen deep, ye product of fleshs sinned! Forget mystery! For i am a thing deeper still.
frolicking dolphin
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since 2003-02-23
Posts 268
my own special world
4 posted 2003-08-09 04:00 PM

I feel the same way about someone right now and it took until summer vacation to realize how much i loved him, nice work!

~*~Karen~*~

~Dream like you'll live forever,live like you'll die tomorrow~
Manth88
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since 2003-06-15
Posts 45
IL, USA
5 posted 2003-09-02 11:03 PM

Hey Gurl! Great poem, I also agree with Jaysh, about the best one, and u r awesome at writin poems keep it up.

!^*Manth*^!
dizzyblondeme
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since 2003-08-27
Posts 11
NE, England
6 posted 2003-09-07 11:01 AM

Well Done I like this alot
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