navwin » Archives » Teen Poetry #6 » God...
Teen Poetry #6
Post A Reply Post New Topic God... Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Gabkicks
Junior Member
since 2003-06-04
Posts 13


0 posted 2003-08-02 12:46 PM


I don't want your pity
Just give me death
Kill whats within me
Take away my breath

The disease hit me after just one of her stares
The pain ripped through me and no one cared

There was no blood, only tears onseen and screams unheard from words not said.
There was no love, no sweet soft lips, no tender hand against my head.

Only pain I ask you to take away
Before my thoughts and actions lead me astray... from you

© Copyright 2003 Gabkicks - All Rights Reserved
Riley
Deputy Moderator 5 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Senior Member
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038
in the pouring rain
1 posted 2003-08-02 04:10 PM


i'll have to say, this is one of the best i have seen in pip in a long time. this was an amazing poem...i loved the whole concept...great poem!


riley

* the pouring rain kisses my lips with innocence as you look into my eyes *

Gabkicks
Junior Member
since 2003-06-04
Posts 13

2 posted 2003-08-02 05:01 PM


Thanks for reading it. I'm sorry about the spelling errors. I wrote it late at night and i'm going a little crazy
Riley
Deputy Moderator 5 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Senior Member
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038
in the pouring rain
3 posted 2003-08-02 05:26 PM


crazy is fun  

* the pouring rain kisses my lips with innocence as you look into my eyes *

Gabkicks
Junior Member
since 2003-06-04
Posts 13

4 posted 2003-08-02 05:32 PM


sorry... not this kinda crazy
Riley
Deputy Moderator 5 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Senior Member
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038
in the pouring rain
5 posted 2003-08-02 10:01 PM


hey, if you need to talk e-mail me, i am always on...clink4u@aol.com

recently gone thru rough times and maybe able to help!


riley

* the pouring rain kisses my lips with innocence as you look into my eyes *

dertah
Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584

6 posted 2003-08-03 08:56 PM


*hatred is with you*

good write.

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Teen Poetry #6 » God...

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary