Teen Poetry #6 |
Over and Over Again |
Evie Junior Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 15 |
Hurting inside, This pain is hard to hide. Desperate to find a way, To let go of this pride. No one in whom I can confide. Don't wanna keep reliving these lies. Things of the past, Turned into ash, That cannot be swept away, I've got to pay. No forgiveness for myself, I won't listen to anyone else, I know what I've done is not allright. I'll continue to beat this heart till it has bled. There's no way on earth I am going to confess. Numerous holes don't make me "blessed." If you even just take a look at my face, You'd know my life is a mess. No where to turn to, Except here in this place of unforgetfullness. No place of bliss, That I'm able to kiss. Hatefulness leaves me pissed. Once again I become dismissed. Happiness is what I wish. Tiffany Evangeline [This message has been edited by Evie (07-31-2003 12:59 PM).] |
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Riley
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
this is amazing.....simply amazing. i loved the emotion in this, and it was just great.......thanks for the read... riley *the bloody tide comes in on the shore, time after time* |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
wow this is awesome and powerful and just awesome! |
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chicken Junior Member
since 2003-07-27
Posts 44 |
complete brilliance(dont think thats a word but shows how much i liked it!) -Emma |
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Evie Junior Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 15 |
Hey guys, wassup? Thanx 4 all your replies.....they're much appreciated....I have a question for anyone that can answer it.....lol.....what does "Junior" Member mean? I was just curious becuz when I posted a reply to someone's poem the other day it said that under my name in the left-hand corner.....anyone know? Thanx 4 ur time and opinion.....I'm lovin' it! Laterz! Tiffany Evangeline |
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dertah Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584 |
happiness.....ahh yes, i remember now..... makaveli.... |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
Hey Tiff... You did a great job on this one. Very emotional. I think you could work with it a little. Add a bit of diversity. Make it not so general. I like the part about ashes.. I loved it though. ~Lex.. [This message has been edited by Lexy (08-01-2003 08:40 PM).] |
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