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Evaporation |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
I almost will myself to cry. To express half the sadness I have inside. But they barely come, barely surface, and I push them back into their place. The natural cyle of evaporation. I look with dry eyes out into this desert that awaits me. They hope for rain. So do I. |
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AlostHeart Member
since 2003-05-01
Posts 78Wisconsin, U.S. |
Lexy, can you tell me what this is truley about? Otherwise i think the writing is good. ~Tori Louise~ |
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Riley 
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
amazing, amazing write here....the first line brought the poem in with power...and the end was awesome! quote: i almost hate to be cliche but i could relate a lot! loved it riley *the bloody tide comes in on the shore, time after time* |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
Tori~ Sometimes I write things even I don't understand. What this is really about is..tears, being in so much pain that you can't cry anymore. And everyone around you sees your pain and hopes you'll get well. Something to that extent I believe. Thank you so much for your reply.  ~Lex |
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OtherSideOfTheMirror Member
since 2002-12-19
Posts 245 |
that was quite good. I like the point and I like the relation to the rain... I thought it was well planned and written and really had good meaning. ~cassi |
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dertah Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584 |
righteo, bravo and good write chum. chereo. |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
righteo, bravo, chereo,I sence a poet. oh by the way I love how you refer to yourself as haterd, its great!  Thank you cassi. I admire your writing..so it is a great compliment comming from you. I wasn't really sure if i should post this. But I'm glad I did. Thanks guys. ~Lex |
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