Teen Poetry #6 |
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fear |
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HomieX Junior Member
since 2003-07-24
Posts 10 |
No one can understand me No one can feel the same as I do The feeling that people all around me, really don’t see me Walk by me without out stretched hand of hope I can’t do anything to stop this It’s taking me over Day in day out, night till morning, a dark cloud covers my eyes, Thoughts and feelings Caged in by lack of light Fear drives my life, drives it straight down Soon I’ll be nothing, oh Maybe that’s what I need to be Live a life with no life There will always be this fear to stop me from finding my way I hold my head to the ground; cry out to God to take it all away Maybe he can’t understand me either I try to break down a wall to freedom, but my fear grabs me back with tightened thoughts. I fear I’m not good enough for this world I fear truth is against me I can’t fight this fear anymore Life ain’t so wonderful when you hate what you are Fearing everything in life Where is my peace that I long for, this fear is what I have Beaten down by a world so hate filled Look at me now, look at me now I am nothing, nothin Day in day out, night till morning, a dark cloud covers my eyes, Thoughts and feelings Caged in by lack of light, fear. Why do I hurt this way, have to fallow this road to never ending pain God now I have become something that has no meaning I lay to rest my rusted hart This fear drives my life, drives it straight down Soon I’ll be nothing, oh Maybe that’s what I need to be Live a life with no life Fallen down, fallen down to stay. Caged in by lack of light Freedom can’t be found |
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OtherSideOfTheMirror Member
since 2002-12-19
Posts 245 |
this was unique... it had a lot of emotion and I can tell you mean what you say. It didn't keep my attention the whole way through but that's probably just because I'm singing with Sister Hazel right now... anyhoo, nice work. its genuine and sincere, and no one can ask for more. ~cassi |
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Silent Evincar Member
since 2003-07-22
Posts 179Here There and Places Between |
I Loved it!! Great, emotional,pleading, asking,realizing... are all you need in this piece huh? Well in the midst of it all there seems to be a little too much. I liked the reference to fear but was used to an extent. In the end though it did bring out the only way to live life.... NJS |
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HomieX Junior Member
since 2003-07-24
Posts 10 |
Ok thanks guys. That was one of my first writes. Im 17 so i havent been doing this long. Thanks for the input. I see what you mean by useing fear too much... Thanks again |
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Peeps-Peter Junior Member
since 2003-07-19
Posts 14 |
this was a very sad, emotional poem. I loved it...very good. ~Peter... ![]() |
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