Teen Poetry #6 |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
I'm holding onto you figuritively. Wishing, literally. Pointlessly. With hands too weak to support you. Rusted and decaying. I've worked too hard to hold on. A sense of realization flows through me. No matter how I try I can't release you from my gentle grasp. My pitiful attempt to tell you something, I'm inacpable of by words. I posses you. I'm breaking into minute pieces.. and as I die you die as well. Ashes to ashes. No fire ever burnt here. We know better. Just a wish. Holding onto something that was honestly nothing. Where am I walking to? Everything is becomming much too blurry. And painfully familiar. These are words I've heard before, read before said before... The tears that fall taste the same. I'm living of of them, off of this nothingness. I'm barely moving, and they are passing me quickly now. Because I'm still trying, to hold onto you, my hands are still open to you. As if I didn't notice you left long before. With the crowd. I'm still reaching, but my fingers are rusted over, unable to get a solid grip. I'm too weak to support you. Leave me to this, if you will. Lost in this repition. Everythings been said before. [This message has been edited by Lexy (07-23-2003 08:07 PM).] |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
This was fantastic...I especially loved the third stanza, it was so poetic and loaded with amazing imagery. Well done! ~I haven't memorized all of the cute things to say but I'm working on it~ |
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Match Member
since 2002-07-01
Posts 286Canada Edmonton |
Thats was great, im in love with it. My new favorite poem. -ash I'm just kickin it up |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
wow, someone being in love with the way I mindless throw words together and stupidly call it poetry, now that is utterly amazing to me. . I'm glad, thank you so much. I really like this piece as well, it has some very special meanings. ~Lex.. |
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dertah Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584 |
wow. chills just rolled up my spine. good job. |
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Silent Evincar Member
since 2003-07-22
Posts 179Here There and Places Between |
It does happen doesn't it? The Feeling that no matter what; we just can't grip it. The person is gone and we will die trying to hold on to what may not have existed in years... slowly rusting over. Touching.And thanx NJS |
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peachesNcream Senior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 513Ocean Of Tears |
Frightening and true...Great write! ~Jess "At the touch of love, everything becomes a poem." -Plato |
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