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collarbone_girl Junior Member
since 2003-07-14
Posts 45Wonderland |
Too many tears have been wasted Thinking of white hands holding my hips And silver kisses on my neck Too many pages have been torn up, Burnt up, on Ocean Machine eyes And quiet, dark nights. Too many dreams have been spent In eyeliner and lollipops Chained to your smile I'll never hear your whispered song in my ear Or wake up with your fingers in my hair... Or come out the shower to be greeted with an eternal Kiss I'll never have the chance to tell you How much i loved you, thought about you (Tink about you, love you) My tear, star, you, death studded notebook knows So why do i still long to hear you say "Bee I Love You" ? This Cool Night Air Is Curious... |
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dertah Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584 |
very nice write. silver kisses, aahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh. there it is again. |
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Silent Evincar Member
since 2003-07-22
Posts 179Here There and Places Between |
Its not too much to ever ask for huh? All those things were done for the little things that makes people so happy. Very nice and delicate, fargile if you will. Keep up the good work. |
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EleanorMoonbaby Member
since 2002-09-02
Posts 202England, UK |
I usually hate breakuppy type poems, but this one was actually quite good. You didn't whine, and the poem had a structure. Nice one. Ellie  I'm not dead, OK? I'm just a little electroencephalographically challenged! |
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Rise of Truth Member
since 2003-07-12
Posts 59Beneath the Fury Sun |
"Too many dreams have been spent In eyeliner and lollipops Chained to your smile" This was my favorite. "Our child is in your hands |
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