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Sweetpoet16m4u04
Member

since 2002-11-10

Posts 153
Ma, U.S.A

0 posted 2003-07-23 02:38 PM

Is it wrong for me to love you
Knowing so little about your life?
Maybe I'm just being foolish
For putting my heart through all this strife.

What I feel could not be mistaken
For lust or infatuation;
What I feel for you seems real,
And it brightens up every dull situation.

What if nothing ever comes of us?
And I never get to tell you how I feel?
What if I keep it all inside?
And I never get to know if my feelings are real?

All I know is every time I think of you
I want to open up my heart,
For some reason I'm afraid
That nothing will ever start.

If I let you know how I feel
I don't want to look stupid
And see the look on your face
Asking me why I did what I did.

How I want so much to hold you
And feel your arms around me
Telling me you feel the same
And together we could truly be.

I look into your sparkling eyes
And smile back at you
As we are about to kiss, the dream ends
I realize it's not true.

You could never feel that way for me
You could never look at me that way.
So before I go to bed at night
I kneel down and pray.

For a chance to get to know you
As a friend and hopefully more
As I grow to love you day by day
These dreams don't suffice like before.

I need more than dreams
I need you.
And I need to feel happy
I need this love to be true…

AngelShell
Member

since 2000-03-01

Posts 446
not heaven nor hell so...

1 posted 2003-07-23 06:19 PM

I liked the ideas here, they were very nice, there was an honest sincerity that really made it's way through.

I'm not sure if I'm completely convinced about the rhyming however, it seemed to be a little dull and forced in some places.

Other than that it was a very good write and was very believable.

Well done.

~I haven't memorized all of the cute things to say but I'm working on it~

dertah
Senior Member

since 2003-06-18

Posts 584

2 posted 2003-07-24 01:06 AM

ha ha, i heed you advice. once you achieve this love, because if you want it bad enough you will, it will only disappiont you. but thats just my life experience. so dont take my advice to heart.

Sweetpoet16m4u04
Member

since 2002-11-10

Posts 153
Ma, U.S.A

3 posted 2003-07-24 12:07 PM

well thank you so far for the great comments and yes the rhyming was a little forced but it still got the point across i think

Silent Evincar
Member

since 2003-07-22

Posts 179
Here There and Places Between

4 posted 2003-07-25 02:17 AM

Ahhh the cries of a desperate person in Love... the prayer and hope. Fantasies of kisses and enchanting eyes. So close yet so far... but sometimes it isn't what you baragined for. The rhyme was nice... a little over strengthened but hey its all gravy.

NJS

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