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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
Well I was trying to write a friendship poem to Travis but the begining sucked and I was becoming disgusted with it so I set it aside for the moment and wrote another about the man that is always on my mind..I don't really like this one either but what are you going to do right? heh Although it's better than the rest, this word can never pass the test; it fails in all capacity to describe the things you mean to me. I need a word that's soft and mellow but painted bright with sunshine yellow I need a word to see my pain a word that's proud, but never vain. I need a word that says, "I care", that goes where no one else would dare. I need a word that's fair and just. I need a word of sultry lust. I need a word to hold me tight to comfort me throughout each night I need a word of fun and play to greet me as I start each day. I need a word to tell me plain when I'm in error once again. I need a word that's fearless, bold, not slow and weak and tired and old. I need a word of tender touch a word that needs ME very much. I need a word that's sparkling new to describe the love I feel for you. The problem with resisting temptation is you never know if you'll get the chance again ~Bella~ [This message has been edited by *Belabebeautiful* (07-22-2003 01:10 AM).] |
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Silent Evincar Member
since 2003-07-22
Posts 179Here There and Places Between |
I LIKE this piece SOOO much that I'm going to give you that word. It's... somewhere, wait I foregot it. Well you know what, its obvious YOU understand it better than me. Good luck. (I want to see more of these pieces that are "not good.")  |
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dertah Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584 |
awww, that was cute. very good write, nice flow. |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
what craziness is this that I'm up at six in the morning checking my poem!! oh yeah..work..thanks for the replies guys I'm glad that you liked it, now that I go back and reread it today I'm likeing it a little more as well. But it's off to work with me, thanks again for the comments! ~Live and Laugh~ The problem with resisting temptation is you never know if you'll get the chance again |
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Toasty Member
since 2003-06-09
Posts 74my little hole in wisconsin |
if this isn't " good" I'd love to see what you do consider to be your better stuff!wonderful. simply wonderful. ~toasty "Nothing is so strong as gentleness; Nothing so gentle as real strength." -Francis de Sales. |
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peachesNcream Senior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 513Ocean Of Tears |
 I LOVE how the suspense built up until the end. I was VERY satisfied with it and glad I read it. This was a good poem, don't doubt it! ~Jess  "If I could give you one gift it would be my eyes...So you could see how it feels to be me looking at you." -Unknown |
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Star T Member
since 2002-07-12
Posts 182Philadelphia, US |
hey u just replied to my poem.thanx a lot i'm glad u liked it.but i dint like ur poem though...i LOVED it!its deep and very nice.kind of inspired me to write a poem on love. keep writing my friend... |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
yes. This is very good. I often feel the same way, in fact I was writing my friend the other day, and telling him that they would have to invent a word in order to describe the way I feel about him..this poem really hit home. I loved it. ~Lex.. [This message has been edited by Lexy (07-23-2003 02:46 PM).] |
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chicken Junior Member
since 2003-07-27
Posts 44 |
sorry i know this was written ages ago but i have to post a message to get this thread in my library im pretty sure there are other ways but i havent mastered that one quite yet! thanx for a great read anyway at least u know theres still people reading an enjoying your poetry! -Emma |
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Song_for_Serenity Member
since 2003-05-28
Posts 97USA |
Hey babes! Great poem. Tis perdyful. Poor Travis... you are going to write him one, yes? Damn...ditched for Mr. JL. Heh. Anyhoo, see? I haven't gone anywhere, I just stopped posting poetry. And since I can't seem to get a hold of you elsewhere, I'm just going to invite you this way. AC's 16th is coming up and his mom and I are planning a surprise party for him at his house. It's the 10th at 1. Bring food, it's a potluck (I know that's not the correct spelling, but it gets the point across). Erm, if you need to know anything else, just give me a call. I think his whole family's gonna be there. Oh yeah, and tell Travis. It's even harder to get a hold of that boy. Anyhoo, have a spiffy day!  ~Angela |
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