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Teen Poetry #6

i haven't named it yet

sitaisnumbauno
New Member

since 2003-06-21

Posts 7
Texas, U.S.A

0 posted 2003-07-21 11:17 PM

ive got a mom whose psycho
and really doesnt care
ive got a dad who duznt kno my age
and is hardly ever here

ive got best friends who r to0 selfish
to whipe my tears away
and most of my other friends
use me every day

ive got a couple guy friends
who dont care how i feel

i mean wut do they really want
think about it .. for real
this isnt for you to feel sorry
and do not pity me

its just my way of showing you
my life isn't (always) happy

so next time you judge a person
look beneath the outside
for what there life is really like
and what they choose to0 hide

[This message has been edited by sitaisnumbauno (07-23-2003 12:04 AM).]

Silent Evincar
Member

since 2003-07-22

Posts 179
Here There and Places Between

1 posted 2003-07-22 12:40 PM

Yes, the sub-headings are great and add to0 the jump of your personality. Oh and the o0's were cool

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

2 posted 2003-08-01 09:07 PM

If you realize that you have choosen to hide, then choose to reveal. I liked this.
~Lex

~*BayBee*~
Member

since 2003-04-09

Posts 65
In The Clouds...

3 posted 2003-08-01 10:59 PM

i really liked this poem because you were just telling how you feel straight up.. great job..
~*BayBee*~

Riley

Senior Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

4 posted 2003-08-02 01:21 PM

this had amazing simplicty and honesty...hard to find. little bit cliche on the topic, but you did it well. this was an amazing amazing poem...i loved it

riley

* the pouring rain kisses my lips with innocence as you look into my eyes *

sitaisnumbauno
New Member

since 2003-06-21

Posts 7
Texas, U.S.A

5 posted 2003-08-02 09:43 PM

Thanks everyone for your comments, sorry i haven't visitied lately because my computer has been messin up lately once again thanks...

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