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HopelessRomanticGuy
Member

since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

0 posted 2003-07-21 08:06 PM

Will we cease to remember
What our love is all about?
Will we lose this burning ember;
cover it over with lust and doubt?

Shall we surrender hope;
that which none can live without?
Shall we forget such hope,
only to be again lost in doubt?

Shall we give in
and surrender ourselves to lust?
Shall we put our faith all in
that which will only turn to dust?

These are my thought as I ponder thee,
and think of what may become of we;
that we who hold this growing special light,
might surrender to the dreadful night.

So what say you, my love?
Shall we stand and fight?
Lifted upon angels wings above,
strong and defiant in defense of the light.

I hope we will always remember
the warmth of this love into forever.
Nourishing this burning ember
with the love we make together.

For only together
might our souls stand,
and shine this light forever,
against this cold, hard land.

Forever I will stand
always here with you.
Now stay and hold my hand
and together we'll go somewhere new.
~Rich~

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

1 posted 2003-07-21 08:23 PM

hmm..I liked it, I would say, it was good. I especially liked the style you wrote in, it changed your poem from being a bit cliche, to being somewhat unique. I loved the last stanza.
Keep postin'
~Lex...

OtherSideOfTheMirror
Member

since 2002-12-19

Posts 245

2 posted 2003-07-21 08:31 PM

all i'm going to say is...

read it aloud.

~cassi

*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

3 posted 2003-07-21 09:06 PM

Yay! Another from you! I don't see your work in here often enough anymore! I would have to say that this isn't one of my favorites from you though I loved the meaning behind the poem, such a simple question yet the answer means so much..sigh..yes love poems happen to have a soft spot with me!! Anyways I would look at the ending of the first two stanza's, they are the same and for some reason that just threw me off, I'm not completely sure why, sorry I can't help you more with that part, but it just didn't seem to flow correctly there. Other than that it's a heartfelt piece, beautiful job
~Live and Laugh~

The problem with resisting temptation is you never know if you'll get the chance again
~Bella~

Silent Evincar
Member

since 2003-07-22

Posts 179
Here There and Places Between

4 posted 2003-07-22 01:41 AM

Paper what a beautiful thing, some things are ment fore it soely. Thank goodness this one was shared with us. I must say the rhyme felt uneasy to me... just a little thing thats all

BabieDoll
Member

since 2003-02-13

Posts 268
BFE

5 posted 2003-07-22 12:03 PM

I really, REALLY liked this poem. I could relate to it perfectly. I fought long and hard for who I'm with now...but in the end, we're doing the best we ever have. Good luck with you and your girlfriend...

~J.Lynn

"In life you must dance like no one is watching, sing like no one is listening and love like it's never going to hurt..."

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