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Teen Poetry #6

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Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2003-07-17 11:59 AM

Craving the truth
But you tell only lies
I can see all the laughter
Caged behind your eyes
Your words pull me down
Dragging me into this hole
As all the shadows of the past
Begin to taunt my soul
So no longer can I conceal
Whats beneath my skin
I'll let you know how I feel
Correct me if the word's to thin
BETRAYED

If You Wanna See A Rainbow, You've Gotta Live Through The Rain. And If You Wanna See Through Love, You've Gotta Live Through The Pain.

BabieDoll
Member

since 2003-02-13

Posts 268
BFE

1 posted 2003-07-17 12:03 PM

Ooo I like, I like, I LOVE. This was really good Staci! I think this is one of my favorites of yours so far. Keep it up!

~J.Lynn

"In life you must dance like no one is watching, sing like no one is listening and love like it's never going to hurt..."

poeticfighter
New Member

since 2003-06-08

Posts 7

2 posted 2003-07-17 12:39 PM

kool poem
i can think of alot of people i want to give it to

dertah
Senior Member

since 2003-06-18

Posts 584

3 posted 2003-07-17 12:43 PM

haha, dude, very excellent work. betrayal, haha.

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

4 posted 2003-07-17 04:27 PM

ooo..I loved that. so good, especially the end. I love your style.
~Lex..

SilentTears
Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

5 posted 2003-07-17 10:23 PM

OOOO Stac! This one is awesome! I really like the rhyme scheme. I can definitely see our 'little groups' writing style change and mature...This was very good. Nice job. Love's.

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

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