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Just me |
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Dayna_Sorrow New Member
since 2003-07-13
Posts 4 |
See that girl who doesn’t talk? She’s just me. See that girl with the face of Sorrow? She’s just me. See that girl with the dream but has nothing? She’s just me. See that girl by herself? She’s just me. Do you see her? Do you? See that girl who is crying? She’s just me. See that girl who’s tall and abnormal? She’s just me. See that girl who walks down the street? She’s just me. See that girl with no hope? She’s just me. Do you see her? Do you? See that girl sitting by the sea? No, no one’s there. See that girl lying in the road? No, no one’s there. See that girl with no care? No, no one’s there. See that girl waiting for the world to pass her? No, no one’s there. Remember that girl who left us and isn’t coming back? I wish that she’s me. |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
The fifth stanza, I really liked that part. I'm a little confused about the ending..if you wouldn't mind explaining it to me?  I have felt like this many times before. I loved this, keep up the great work.~Lex  |
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Rise of Truth Member
since 2003-07-12
Posts 59Beneath the Fury Sun |
Comprehension sometimes brings dread. Sometimes. But of this i am sure; abnormality is the basis of diversity and thus beauty. There's no shame but what you create for youself. Am i right about the last stanza? Nevermind, i don't care to know. I am the prophet |
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Cinderelly Member
since 2001-12-31
Posts 189NM, USA |
I really like your poem and am adding it to my library! |
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