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This Illness
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This Illness |
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peachesNcream Senior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 513Ocean Of Tears |
This illness has sucked the life out of me, Below in the underworld, Is where my soul lies, Broken and lost, Flaming heat sizzles the pain, Eases everything, Makes it all just a little easier, I mingle in a dark corner, Eyes fixated on the shining moon out my window, Slowly going insane without complete darkness, Horror lurks in every breath I take in, Bringing more pain, Is this all I'll ever know? ...This Illness. "If I could give you one gift it would be my eyes...So you could see how it feels to be me looking at you." -Unknown |
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sitaisnumbauno New Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 7Texas, U.S.A |
that was a very deep poem, allot of hurt and probably truth. keep it up. - Karina - |
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SilentTears Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 371Lost and Broken |
Hmm...don't remember you reading this one to me before... It's different, but good. It's not like what you normally write. I can see your writing style changing. I think that everyone's is...I know mine has. Anyway...nice job. Love's. As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
hummm...very well done, very real and sad. I enjoyed. |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
So deep and so sad..and so lost almost...very touching to me and yet my heart weeps for you to feel such pain. The piece is very moving.  ~Live and Laugh~ The problem with resisting temptation is you never know if you'll get the chance again ~Bella~ [This message has been edited by *Belabebeautiful* (07-07-2003 12:42 AM).] |
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