Teen Poetry #6 |
My Other Half |
tapper798 Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 353My own world |
My Other Half I get swallowed in your arms, I get lost in your eyes, Your arms are another comfort, Your eyes the deep blue tide. You hold my hand, You kiss my cheek, your hand, so warm, My heart, so weak. Your love is so strong, so pure, I feel the same way, I just never can find, the right words to say. You are my friend, my love, the one and only, Your are my savior, my guy, I am never lonley. You help carry my through life, You are my other half, You make me whole, You make me laugh. I am enfolded in you love, Walking blindly through, But there is always going to be, you to guide me the way you do. You kiss me on the lips, and smile down at me, I have to tell you, You have to see! The words run off my lips, so freely and so true, They sound just right, just, "I love you". I interrupted you, What were you going to say? I wait to hear, if you feel the same way. It's funny how 3 words have, such meaning,power, and truth, I watch in wonder and you, suddenly murmer" I love you ,too". |
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Magia_negra Member
since 2003-07-16
Posts 77CA, USA |
What a great, strong feeling i see in this poem! ...somos los locos para siempre |
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sixington Member
since 2003-07-14
Posts 53Utah |
I really liked how in the first half of this poem, you didn't use negative words at all but it still gives a sense of something bad coming. its very nice. |
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BrokenDreams Member
since 2003-02-09
Posts 425In The Clouds |
This really touched me because my boyfriend and I said "I love you" for the first time like 2 days ago. You captured the feelings of this very well. Thank you for the read, and if you don't mind, I'd like to put this in my library. -Jen |
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Toasty Member
since 2003-06-09
Posts 74my little hole in wisconsin |
Wow.. you did a great job of describing of fist saying those three little words. I'm adding it to my personal library. Keep up the good work! ~ toasty "Nothing is so strong as gentleness; Nothing so gentle as real strength." -Francis de Sales. |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
Very beautiful poem! I really love this one, it's soothing. Again, well done, this one's going in my library. Hope to see more from you. WinterWren |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
I've been needing to read something like this.. I've needed to smile. This brought back the memories and feelings of my relationship with my girlfriend, and reminded me how much meaning there really is behind those three little words. This is a great poem, and in my library it goes! 'Rich' always here with you. Now stay and hold my hand and together we'll go somewhere new. ~Rich~ |
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dertah Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584 |
haha, powerful words spoken. good read. i once would have wrote something of the like, but.... |
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Silent Evincar Member
since 2003-07-22
Posts 179Here There and Places Between |
I know these feelings all too well, congratulations you made my heart skip a beat. Brings me too a different place not too long ago... I better stop |
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tapper798 Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 353My own world |
Thank you for the replies! I really appriciate it! |
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