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Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2003-06-29 03:09 PM

~*Just for those who may get confused, this poem is about a completely different person than the one I wrote about in "The Rejected". Some of the lines may look the same, but they're about two completely different topics, so they should be interpreted differently. Just thought I'd make that clear.*~

Before I go,
I wanted to let you know
I'm writing this song,
to tell you I've loved you all along....
~~~~~~~~~~
These tears are real,
and full of regret.
I can't mask how I feel,
and I cannot forget,
all the stupid things said.
It still haunts me in my sleep,
like a broken record in my head.
I can no longer keep,
ALL THIS LOCKED INSIDE!!

I just know,
that I don't want to cry-
I don't want to think-
about this anymore.

I don't know what to say
or how to give an explanation why-
why I chose to run away
or why I ever said goodbye,
but my world fell apart,
I have the proof,
it's called my broken heart.
And now the truth,
I WILL NO LONGER HIDE!!

I just know,
I don't WANT to cry-
I don't want to think-
about this anymore....

So as YOU see,
I'm putting the pieces back,
INto place,
where they belong,
in MY LIFE!

If You Wanna See A Rainbow, You've Gotta Live Through The Rain. And If You Wanna See Through Love, You've Gotta Live Through The Pain.

SilentTears
Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

1 posted 2003-06-29 03:23 PM

Wow...I really like this one. I definitely felt it the whole way through. Awesome. The emotion expressed was great. Nice job. Love's.

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

[This message has been edited by SilentTears (06-29-2003 03:30 PM).]

Kandi
Member

since 2000-06-14

Posts 354
North of Hell

2 posted 2003-06-29 03:45 PM

I'm noticing that what you write is full of raw emotion...I like that - it's the most honest form of writing. And capitalization can be distracting, but the way you use it is effective...it really drives home the frustration and anger in the appropriate places. Nicely done...will definitely look for more from you!
~Kay

The day you were born, you were born free
That is your privilege.

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