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Teen Poetry #6

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rapturedmist
Junior Member

since 2003-06-23

Posts 30
USA

0 posted 2003-06-26 01:59 AM

Diversions of the mind are all but lost
as I sit here wondering what went wrong
The days pass by me in a dazed complexity
shrouding me in this cloud of nothingness

High above luminescent stars
ignite and cast shadows of hope
like bleeding hearts dancing in the moonlight

Obliteration enlights the morning sky
slowly fading into a purple haze of abeyance.
-Everyday is a new day
but inspiration wears thin

-RM
[sigh] This writer's block is starting to get to me. And this is missing something but I don't know what exactly.

[This message has been edited by rapturedmist (06-26-2003 04:40 AM).]

BabieDoll
Member

since 2003-02-13

Posts 268
BFE

1 posted 2003-06-26 10:50 AM

I think this poem is good as is...it doesn't really need anything added ( in my opinion ) Very good write hun...BTW: you are a good writer! LOL.

~J.Lynn

"In life you must dance like no one is watching, sing like no one is listening and love like it's never going to hurt..."

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

2 posted 2003-06-26 12:25 PM

The poems cool but what are you getting at.

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