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*Hurley*Girly*
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since 2003-06-22

Posts 6

0 posted 2003-06-22 01:19 PM

This is my first time posting on this forum.. please reply to my poems as i post them .. thank you

The shining rays of the real me cannot get through the barrier of your expectations.
The faint sounds of failure fill my mind as if I'm not good enough for you.
The echoes of my smallest imperfections shatter the love your heart was holding for me.
The product of my insecurity forms from the piercing words descending from your lips.
With every glance I recieve, the hope of becoming yours seems to slip away.

*Hurley*Girly*
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since 2003-06-22

Posts 6

1 posted 2003-06-22 01:27 PM

this is another one of my poems....

Deep into your eyes I find what I am looking for.
Keeping the silence, I dare not speak a word.
Wondering if I should risk it all, I hide my hidden desire.
Every flaw coming from within you, forms the perfection in which I seek.
I catch myself thinking of how I am possibly enduring life without you.
The path of my survival tends to be misguiding me into your embracing arms.
Tho I know its meant to be, you don't seem to think the same.
My heart is in starvation for you love.

*Hurley*Girly*
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since 2003-06-22

Posts 6

2 posted 2003-06-22 01:28 PM

and another...

My hope vanishes in the eternal judgement you have revealed. Our futures existance lies in your frail hands. And yet these unfamilier thoughts of our lives swell within the dungeons of my mind. Abandoned with nothing more than mere memory, I continue to wander aimlessly down the forbidden pathway. Mindlessly, I spread my undying passion for you only to accept the truth of failure once again.

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*Hurley*Girly*
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since 2003-06-22

Posts 6

3 posted 2003-06-22 01:30 PM

this is my favourite one so far...

Precious memories escape from the innermost holes of my soul, seeking a heart where not even the slightest visions are lost. Striving upon perfection, your blackened soul is no match for my uneased emotions. Once more the distant call of your cry, tears at my heart as if we're torn apart forever. I sit here breathlessly awaiting my chance to be set free, simply to discover the pale meaning behind love.

lil cherry
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since 2002-10-02

Posts 86
Ont, Can.

4 posted 2003-06-22 02:48 PM

it might help if you posted each poem seperately and gave ppl a chance to read and respond to each one. you also can't just expect ppl to resond, you have to go and read and resond to other poems on the site as well.
~~*lil cherry*~~

Match
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since 2002-07-01

Posts 286
Canada Edmonton

5 posted 2003-06-22 03:44 PM

I only read two of them,
But good

I'm just kickin it up

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