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snoduck
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0 posted 2003-06-07 11:44 PM



I am not real
Nor are the people
That continually surround me

My life is a dream
A twisted nightmare
I can't escape

Time does not exist
Just a mere passing
Of day and night

Fantasies
That fill my head
Confuse me

No matter how hard
I muster inside to try
Failure always follows

I'm being put to a test
A test of strength and skills
To see how much I can handle
Which is never enough

Everythings in my way
I'm pulsating
Too afraid to walk away

Life is in my head
An imaginative story
Formed by the watchers.


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1 posted 2003-06-08 12:02 PM


I really like this one, it's emotional. It points out feelings that are hard to write about:

"Time does not exist
Just a mere passing
Of day and night"

What a line that expresses a lot more than it seems to - to the naked eye.

LegalSecret69
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since 2003-06-04
Posts 69
Virginia
2 posted 2003-06-08 12:09 PM


I agree...this was full of emotion. It was excellent. -Secret
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