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no1atall
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0 posted 2003-06-07 08:21 AM



~What the mountains saw~

Wishes are wasted here...
we've laid sleepy on the horizon,
always the backdrop,
but when all below us changes,
wanes and decays with time,
we remain, still silent,
but whispering our vision to the wind.
We've seen them all
enthralled, watched them dance,
now none remain.
And the eyes of the world are upon us,
focused just short, but glowing.
We've seen them all
and offered shameful applause,
until tonight.
Tonight they burn.
Blazing, blue like the sky,
reddening as she bows to kiss the lake,
humbled, we wonder.
Tonight is eternal,
draped them softly in stars,
silent silver tears, hand in hand.
And they'll say of dreams we saw,
none will remain...
except one,
saved forever

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just in case you wanted to know- a poem about a photo of a certain couple with mountains in the background =)

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WinterWren
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1 posted 2003-06-07 06:57 PM


Very descriptive poem! It's full of imagery, I felt as if I was there myself. The first line drew me right in, excellent poem!
Beautiful.

WinterWren
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LegalSecret69
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2 posted 2003-06-08 09:05 AM


This was beautiful-alot of descriptions...and I have to agree, the first line was excellent.  -Secret
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3 posted 2003-06-08 10:11 AM


NoOne~
Your title drew me in ... and the write held me~
This is an awesome word-picture~
You've quite the talent~
Enjoyed this VERY much~
Welcome to Passions'~
*Huglets*
~*Mrge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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