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no1atall
New Member

since 2003-05-02

Posts 5

0 posted 2003-06-07 07:07 AM

~Hope- A Winter's dream~

As I sit amongst the stars
sweetly lost within the twilight,
I pass between silver clouds, ascend through chill air
and far behind me
painful silence, nothing remains.
Still I’m drawn
by whispered words
carried on winter’s frosty breath,
where twisted shadows lie
tamed by gentle moonlight touch
and where within this enchanted dark,
beyond the dream,
it waits for me
enveloped by timeless hope
as the thawing of winter’s lifeless grasp
brings warmth to morning’s peaceful glow.
Where ice wears thinly while crooked branch
shakes free of season’s frosty arm.
And so through this darkness
blooms a flower,
which waits for me each passing hour.

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Hello! I thought this poem would fit in here, because I'm teen, and its about my life lol. It is also about the hurt and longing when you are apart from someone you love, hope you enjoy! Thanks =)

wvplayernotreally
Member

since 2002-11-06

Posts 215
yakima wa

1 posted 2003-06-07 04:46 PM

Hey this is really good. I enjoyed it. First one i read of yours and I am really looking forward to more

" I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking."

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
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2 posted 2003-06-07 06:36 PM

Definitely fits in....and an excellent entry. Well thought-out, well organized, well written.

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WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

3 posted 2003-06-07 06:51 PM

I really really love this poem!
It is very well written.
Also, Welcome to pip!!!
Again, excellent piece.

WinterWren
Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't mean they don't love you with all they have.

lingering thoughts
Member

since 2003-05-03

Posts 70
Illinois, USA

4 posted 2003-06-07 08:50 PM

Well first off ,
WELCOME TO PIP!!!

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wow! i really liked this one, i liked your word usage throughout the whole poem...
you did a really good job, ill be looking for more of yours!

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