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Teen Poetry #6

UnclipmywingS

clumsy
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since 2002-10-10

Posts 106
canada.

0 posted 2002-10-11 09:34 AM

i'll unclip my wings
to find you in that place again
and the apprehension for sunday
has disappeared, leaving
a trace of ignorance but
no bliss, and i
have no more glitter in
my tangled hair, & my
burkinstocks have
been pulled off my swollen feet,
give me time to become
anything but myself, &
it's not as if you don't know
the real meaning behind
.falling.for.you.again.
i can't help screwing myself over;
i only pray that you'll
help me unclip my wings,
destroy conversations of the past-
forgetting every word you ever said,
and i'm sorry but
i'm not even beautiful in the right
kind of light, and i will
never let you see,
that side of me.

Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

1 posted 2002-10-11 10:33 AM

I really enjoyed the read, I especially enjoyed the last few lines, they are amazing, thanks for sharing

Andrew

Local Parasite

Member Elite

since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

2 posted 2002-10-12 11:20 AM

Hm, this isn't bad... I felt you could have broken up the lines a little bit, to make it flow a lot better.

I love the title and the way it's written. Caught my attention for sure.

Parasite

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

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