Teen Poetry #6 |
DONT READ IT THEN!!! |
Tabitha LeAnn Member
since 2003-03-27
Posts 50Kansas, USA |
LIES HAVE TORN YET ANOTHER FAMILY APART DECEIT CAN TRULY STOP A STRONG BEATING HEART IF ONE MEMBER SHOULD FALL WE SHOULD ALL SOON FOLLOW WITH OUT STALL WHAT BINDED US TOGETHER SHALL NOW BE REMEMBERANCE OF SOMETHING THAT WILL HAUNT US FOREVER THIS WORLD IS NOT HAPPILY EVER AFTER SO GIVE ME PITY FOR MY PRIDE THE MOMENT WATER RUNS THICKER THAN BLOOD WE HAVE ALL DIED AND TO THE LORD CRIED TO PLAY ALONG AND NOT TO TURN AWAY TRULY SHOWS I HAVE SOMETHING SO I WILL CONTINUE TO BE ON MY KNEES AND PRAY WHEN THEY TRUN THERE BACKS PEOPLE YOU THINK YOU CAN TRUST IT LEAVES YOU FEELING AS IF YOU ARE DEAD ASHES TO ASHES AND DUST TO DUST FAMILY IS NOT AS STRONG OF A WORD AS ITS MADE OUT TO BE OR SEEMS AND WHOEVER MADE IT SEEM THAT WAY BASED IT ON HOPES AND DREAMS BUT TO RUN AND HIDE LEAVING ME ALONE WITH NO ONE IN WHICH TO CONFIDE BUT I HAVE TO SET AN EXAMPLE SO I SHALL KEEP MY WORDS TO MYSELF FOR THE FAMILYS SAKE AND LET YOUR LIES SLITHER THROUGH THE FAMILY AS IF YOU ARE A SNAKE WANTING REVEGE BUT KNOWING WHAT IT HOLDS RAISED ON THE QUOTE BEAT THE CHILD AND SPARE THE ROD BUT I SHALL HOLD MY FIST FOR IT SHOULD MAKE ME A BETTER PERSON THAN YOU AND IT HAS BEEN WRITTEN THAT THY PEOPLE SHALL BE MY PEOPLE AND THY GOD MY GOD IF I LIVE MY LIFE BY THIS I WILL BE SUCESSUFUL IN ALL I DO AND EVEN THOUGH YOU ARE MY FAMILY I CAN NOT RESPECT ANY OF YOU !!!SORRY GUYS I WAS IN A HURRY BUT I HOPE YOU GET THE IDEA!!! [This message has been edited by Tabitha LeAnn (05-29-2003 11:44 PM).] |
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Fariegirl Member
since 2003-02-05
Posts 147 |
u r disturbed........ |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571 |
Right.........I think u need some family counseling. *Allison* |
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BrokenDreams Member
since 2003-02-09
Posts 425In The Clouds |
hey, I know how you feel with this one. It's hard when you can't even trust your own family. I hope your situation gets better. luv. Jen oh and BTW I thought having the whole poem in all caps was really distracting. I had a hard time reading the whole thing without getting lost...the words themselves were good though. Every oak tree started out as a couple of nuts who stood their |
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laurie Member
since 2003-05-28
Posts 153canada, ontario |
l know exactly how you feel, living with a family that lies or whatever is one of the hardest things you can go through, but... soemtimes you just have to think 'bite me' and do what your instincts say. as for respect, if they don't earn it, don't give it to them - if they had it and lost it, make em work twice as hard to gain it back,.... Laurie. |
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peachesNcream Senior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 513Ocean Of Tears |
This was pretty good. The caps did bug me a little bit..! LOL. But really, good job. ~Jess "What I am is good enough if I would only be it openly." |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Wow.. while I have had my fair share of family problems, I can't even begin to imagine how you might feel. This is definitely a tough and hurtful situation. Hang in there... Wonderful write. I enjoyed it... you put a lot of yourself into it, and that often makes poetry real poetry. Thanks for sharing. --Marie "You can be idealistic for all of ten seconds before you die." (Imitation of Life) |
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sadpoet Junior Member
since 2003-05-29
Posts 10Tx, USA |
Hang in there, it gets better, trust me. I know how you feel. You did a good job of conveying your meaning through mood and tone, as well as words. Good work. |
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teenpoet Member
since 2001-10-17
Posts 280Michigan |
I hate to be repetitive of others but the caps are most certaintly distracting. But in your poem i can understand EXACTLY how you feel. And really all you can do is deal until you get outta there. Sorry hun. But hey I'm doin the same thing. If you ever need someone to talk to email me. My email address is [email protected] Good luck with it all. Sometimes you can't change what's going to happen but you can change how you percieve it. |
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rapturedmist Junior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 30USA |
I believe respect is something that has to be earned..if they don't earn it don't give it to them. -RM |
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BabieDoll Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 268BFE |
Lots of emotion in this poem. I especially liked the line: "THIS WORLD IS NOT HAPPILY EVER AFTER SO GIVE ME PITY FOR MY PRIDE" Great job! ~J.Lynn "In life you must dance like no one is watching, sing like no one is listening and love like it's never going to hurt..." |
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