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Teen Poetry #6

Forged Metal Rpe

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

0 posted 2003-06-26 08:11 PM

Intensity and challenge
Struggle slow revenge
Dirty once this inside
In mid open filth confide

Sarcasm massive lallabi
Distance solid underlie
Apathy stern complaint
Thirteen soft restraint
Soothing smooth and grey
Stench forewind sway

Chunk by chunk fall
Cold hard not seen at all

Sarcasm massive lallabi
Distance solid underlie
Apathy stern complaint
Thirteen soft restraint
Soothing smooth and grey
Stench forewind sway

Dim candle cook burnt
Follow and shatter weren't
Cripple castle master slain
Focus blade feel pain

Auto army metal fed
Crawl around skull is dead
Charcoal covered figure black
Molten fearsome crack

Sarcasm massive lallabi
Distance solid underlie
Apathy stern complaint
Thirteen soft restraint
Soothing smooth and grey
Stench forewind sway

Chunk by chunk raw
And not seen at all
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Whoever responds tell me what you think about this.
I usually feel kind of weird when i write stuff like this. So i hope you enjoyed it.

xEmperorEmber
Member

since 2000-03-28

Posts 136
tx

1 posted 2003-06-26 08:27 PM

I like it, it feels like theres alot of noise in there... i dont know... i just see forged chunks of things being forced together.. i dont know this is what i get out of it... society advancment... and your perspective on it.. thats what i see.. but im usually wrong.. lol

paul

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