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BabieDoll Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 268BFE 
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Illusions of the mind's eye That only you can see Holding the burden of a heavy heart So close to him, yet so far apart You feel that you cannot go on Alone...and crying... Something feels so unfulfilled Your soul is incomplete He is gone and will never return You feel that you won't ever learn The same mistakes you'll face again Alone...and aching... A life of love is all you wish A chance to be content But he has left and won't be home For a little while you'll feel alone Just don't fret, you'll smile again Alone...now waiting...* "In life you must dance like no one is watching, sing like no one is listening and love like it's never going to hurt..." |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Oh I love this! It's perfect  My only complaint is I wish I'd written it!! Thanks for sharing, much enjoyed Luv, Liz xx "Gorge the honey from life, and live through the stomach aches knowing they will pass..." ~Liz Pinard 2003~ |
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blueyedlioness Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 289USA |
Awww... I love the rhyme scheme... and you kept it going perfectly throughout the whole thing. Nice on getting and keeping interest, too. Awesome. |
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SilentTears Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 371Lost and Broken |
Really, REALLY liked this one. I think this is one of my many favorites of yours. You did a really good job on this. I like the rhyme scheme. Good word usage. Nice write! Loves. As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me |
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