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Teen Poetry #6

Until the Sun Rises

aran
Junior Member

since 2003-05-18

Posts 34

0 posted 2003-05-20 09:39 PM

Until the Sun Rises

Drink the drainage from my sewer and make me cold;
cool me off.

I'm up for the darkness
if you can keep it down long enough
for us to make it out.

No train of thought will take this village
and Vietnam it until it succumbs
(and burn its children and towns).

Drink me drunk until i pass out.
Take me to lunch then
and let them ask me if i am dead.

I swear i won't respond until i'm fed.
until i'm bleeding or have been bled;
until we meet in bed.

Drop the draperies,
down the vodka and
drink yourself to salvation.

I've got no questions and you are still;
ask me for your fill.

Drop the dime
and i'll be sure to stop on it
Until the sun rises and dries up our love.

AlostHeart
Member

since 2003-05-01

Posts 78
Wisconsin, U.S.

1 posted 2003-05-20 10:32 PM

Not sure what your getting at here.?.. Could be touched up a little.
~Tori Louise~

Dont ever love a guy that will never love you back, no matter how hard you try.

BrokenDreams
Member

since 2003-02-09

Posts 425
In The Clouds

2 posted 2003-05-20 11:11 PM

I had to reread to get it, it was kinda confusing. I still liked it though, got some intersting mental pictures goin on...
Jenni

There are three kinds of people in this world, those who can count, and those who can't.

aran
Junior Member

since 2003-05-18

Posts 34

3 posted 2003-05-21 12:47 PM

i admit, it is a weird poem.

Basically, it's about that one night stand type of lust that masquerades as love.

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