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Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2003-05-20 06:41 PM

I didn't believe,
you could decieve,
so much to grieve,
no time to spare.

So much pain,
nothing to gain,
a heart slowly slain,
feelings we didn't share.

But can't you see,
this is reality,
things weren't meant to be,
but you don't seem to care....

If You Wanna See A Rainbow, You've Gotta Live Through The Rain. And If You Wanna See Through Love, You've Gotta Live Through The Pain.

xxshadowxx
Junior Member

since 2003-05-17

Posts 43
Texas

1 posted 2003-05-20 06:51 PM

Short.. but with alot of emotion... I liked it.. Great write!!!!!
~*Carrie*~

"Hard days made me, hard nights shaped me"

BrokenDreams
Member

since 2003-02-09

Posts 425
In The Clouds

2 posted 2003-05-20 08:17 PM

First, I love the rhyme scheme! I don't think I've seen anything like it before, and I love it.

Second, I like the thoughtts expressed int his piece. I've felt that way many many times. Good write.
Jen

There are three kinds of people in this world, those who can count, and those who can't.

blueyedlioness
Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 289
USA

3 posted 2003-05-20 09:29 PM

Oh my GOSH! I LOVED the style of this! Wow... new ideas, new ideas...

AWESOMENESS!!!

AlostHeart
Member

since 2003-05-01

Posts 78
Wisconsin, U.S.

4 posted 2003-05-21 12:19 PM

Good Style, another floooower............ Be happy in all you do!
~Tori Louise~

(Happy days to all who can care!)

Dont ever love a guy that will never love you back, no matter how hard you try.

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

5 posted 2003-05-22 06:34 AM

WOW lol, I'm glad you all liked this so much. This is one of my favorite ways to write, only I don't do it very often lol. Maybe I should *thinks to one's self*....

If You Wanna See A Rainbow, You've Gotta Live Through The Rain. And If You Wanna See Through Love, You've Gotta Live Through The Pain.

SilentTears
Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

6 posted 2003-05-24 04:58 PM

OOOOO!!! I really like this one. Especially the rhyme scheme. Really nice job!

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

spritrider87
Member

since 2003-05-31

Posts 294
NH

7 posted 2003-06-01 01:09 PM

love the poem alot of feeling in it. keep writing.

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